Tuesday, July 12, 2011

How is this introduction? Does it hook, is it interesting?

I think it is rather interesting. The only problem I had with it was the first sentence; I don’t like the whole “…!” thing. It doesn't seem correct. Maybe you can get rid of the explication mark? Also, I think Barty is a fine name for him, you don't have to change it.

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